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Ruin my dreams

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12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 12:53:22 PM EST (GMT-5)
Ruin my dreams, be a lying bastard. do whatever. Right here.........
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 12:56:33 PM EST (GMT-5)
those are REALLY long
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 12:59:20 PM EST (GMT-5)
from what i read so far..sounds good
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:00:38 PM EST (GMT-5)
Thanks rckstr
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:02:49 PM EST (GMT-5)
Less than a paragraph and it's already childish. It's not horrible if it's written for 6 year olds.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:03:20 PM EST (GMT-5)
Are you two reading the same one too?
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:04:10 PM EST (GMT-5)
I looked at 3 different ones.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:06:03 PM EST (GMT-5)
Maybe you should read more than that.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:06:56 PM EST (GMT-5)
How are people supposed to when they can't get passed it. It doesn't flow.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:09:20 PM EST (GMT-5)
Thanks, actual constructive criticism. :)
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 1:18:12 PM EST (GMT-5)
Yeah. anyone else want the job too.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 2:15:05 PM EST (GMT-5)
It was bad at first, but strangely addicting. Maybe you need a bit more detail?
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:23:25 PM EST (GMT-5)
Description yeah. :) I need more of it for sure. After I finish my contest story I'm going to make my other books more descrpitive.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:30:00 PM EST (GMT-5)
Then would come PE Physical education. I just randomly scrolled down and picked out a sentence. The first sentence I came across was that. How redundant is that? I've read pieces of this before, and I can tell you that A. It is very boring and B. It is very childish
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:31:34 PM EST (GMT-5)
And I'm happy to ruin your dream, for a dream is all it will ever be. Better start looking at different careers there buddy boy.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:34:18 PM EST (GMT-5)
I know that is boring, that is my first book. I've fixed a lot of those "Then would come" things. I never have said this is my only career. it would just be an extra thing. i want to be a teacher.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:39:18 PM EST (GMT-5)
Grey Dust literally makes me sick to my stomach. You are so bitter about Christianity. Yippee, you're atheist! So? All you're doing is trying to paint Christians as being ignorant and atheists as being the intelligent ones. Give me a f*cking break.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:41:53 PM EST (GMT-5)
you don't even read the whole thing, i bet you've read about a total of four paragraphs?
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:42:54 PM EST (GMT-5)
If a story isn't engaging enough to read more than 4 paragraphs, there's something wrong.
12 yrs ago - Sunday 11/24/02 - 9:47:12 PM EST (GMT-5)
I would like that you now come on your real name. or PM me on it, if you are afraid to post as your real self.
12 yrs ago - Monday 11/25/02 - 2:07:34 PM EST (GMT-5)
That made no sense, but from the gist of it I say no.
12 yrs ago - Monday 11/25/02 - 3:38:50 PM EST (GMT-5)
He's saying you're an alter, and it's pretty bitchy of you to post as an alter. He wants you to come clean. Say "I am so and so, and I don't like this" But if you're too scared to do that, then go on your other name, and PM him.
12 yrs ago - Monday 11/25/02 - 4:07:36 PM EST (GMT-5)
From what I've read it is good sweetie. I've gotten to about fourth grade I think in Gold Star Academy. The only thing I would change is add some more details, and try not to be so repeatitive. You've got the right idea, it's just sometimes you repeat the same idea three or four times. All in all, the ideas are wonderful though.



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